Post by The Agnolotti Raichu on Jan 5, 2017 22:24:30 GMT
So I have a number of characters on this site now, and I feel like they've been fleshed out enough that I have a solid grasp on them. (In K*S, especially.) So I wanted to get more opinions. That's pretty much it. Like Enigma, I'm not going to bother with linking specific posts, since typically, context is better than no context.
On the Chopping Block:
-Aya Radiata (K*S)
I wanted to convey Aya as a sheltered rich kid. She's supposed to be this innocent soul (complete with dual Moe typing) who doesn't really know what she's getting into. I've said a few times that this is actually "Aya v.2," and in her original work, she actually was a robot, which is why she's nigh-emotionless, which brings me to my main concern. I'm afraid people aren't finding her entertaining. I also might not be using that main idea to its full potential, but I don't really know. Basically, is Aya likable, and if not, what direction do you think I should take her?
-Zoie Kaji (K*S version only)
I've thrown Zoie plenty of places, but I think this is her best portrayal. I'm going to point out the obvious right now and say yes, I know she comes across a lot more mature than her 13 years should let her be. I'm well aware of that, but I feel like she's finally the grumpy brat I want her to be. My main concerns with Zoie are that for one, she doesn't really have a role and just kinda takes up space. For two, I feel like at the moment, she might turn into a hate sink, and I don't want that to happen. Basically, is Zoie likable, or do I need to adjust how bratty and grumpy she is?
-Gwendalyn Summers (K*S)
Well, the secret is out now, so I guess I can put her here. I feel like Gwendalyn is my strongest character right now. Gwendalyn is supposed to be a cunning, manipulative bitch in bubbly, ditzy sheep's clothing. While she hasn't jumped on anyone at time of writing, making judging the first part a little bit tricky, her interaction with Ace O'Spades was supposed to hint towards Gwendalyn being smarter than she comes across as. However, she's shown plenty of her "nice" side, so there's that. Was Gwen's identity concealed well, or could you see through the ruse easily? Also, general thoughts on Gwendalyn would be appreciated, because once again, I think she's actually my best character.
-Simon Delaueva (JoJo), Anabelle Michuru (JoJo), and SPAM (GTFO)
These guys aren't as important, seeing as they all only have a few posts apiece at time of writing, but general thoughts would be appreciated. Maybe also give me some advice for what direction I could take them in, seeing as I don't really know what roles they fill yet.
TL;DR: Are my characters likable? I guess that's really my biggest general concern.
On the Chopping Block:
-Aya Radiata (K*S)
I wanted to convey Aya as a sheltered rich kid. She's supposed to be this innocent soul (complete with dual Moe typing) who doesn't really know what she's getting into. I've said a few times that this is actually "Aya v.2," and in her original work, she actually was a robot, which is why she's nigh-emotionless, which brings me to my main concern. I'm afraid people aren't finding her entertaining. I also might not be using that main idea to its full potential, but I don't really know. Basically, is Aya likable, and if not, what direction do you think I should take her?
-Zoie Kaji (K*S version only)
I've thrown Zoie plenty of places, but I think this is her best portrayal. I'm going to point out the obvious right now and say yes, I know she comes across a lot more mature than her 13 years should let her be. I'm well aware of that, but I feel like she's finally the grumpy brat I want her to be. My main concerns with Zoie are that for one, she doesn't really have a role and just kinda takes up space. For two, I feel like at the moment, she might turn into a hate sink, and I don't want that to happen. Basically, is Zoie likable, or do I need to adjust how bratty and grumpy she is?
-Gwendalyn Summers (K*S)
Well, the secret is out now, so I guess I can put her here. I feel like Gwendalyn is my strongest character right now. Gwendalyn is supposed to be a cunning, manipulative bitch in bubbly, ditzy sheep's clothing. While she hasn't jumped on anyone at time of writing, making judging the first part a little bit tricky, her interaction with Ace O'Spades was supposed to hint towards Gwendalyn being smarter than she comes across as. However, she's shown plenty of her "nice" side, so there's that. Was Gwen's identity concealed well, or could you see through the ruse easily? Also, general thoughts on Gwendalyn would be appreciated, because once again, I think she's actually my best character.
-Simon Delaueva (JoJo), Anabelle Michuru (JoJo), and SPAM (GTFO)
These guys aren't as important, seeing as they all only have a few posts apiece at time of writing, but general thoughts would be appreciated. Maybe also give me some advice for what direction I could take them in, seeing as I don't really know what roles they fill yet.
TL;DR: Are my characters likable? I guess that's really my biggest general concern.